As yesterday's bit of non-sense seems to have caused a chuckle in more places than one, I feel obligated to continue in mirthful mood for a little longer. Many of you were taken with the idea of an ailing doctor. The concept is a trifle unnerving, to say the least. Therefore this morning I've been trying to see possibility in telling one such doctor's story. No offence intended to any of the medical profession who should happen upon the result.
A Bitter Pill
Doctor B rose one morning
as daylight was dawning
and picked up his doctoring bag.
His front door was a jar* n.b this is not a typo -I mean A Jar- as per Jam Pot!
so he climbed in his car
and drove off while waving a flag.
His receptionist stared
she was quite unprepared
for the horrible vision she saw.
She knew in a trice
that he needed advice
as soon as he lurched through the door.
'Your nose drips are glowing
your pimples are growing
how dare you pretend to be well!
Dandruff is flaking
I see your knees shaking
Go home! You are ill, I can tell'.
Doc looked all forlorn
his face flushed and warm,
his backache was giving him grief.
He hurried back home,
gave a shuddering groan
and swallowed two pills for relief.
At this point I either ran out of steam, or my quill pen blotted my copy book beyond recognition, for I couldn't for the life of me find a suitable way to wrap up the sorry tale in fitting jinksy style. At present, it is a little lame, and in need of a word doctor of its own. Please, I need your help and advice on how to finish with a bang - maybe not literally - but a little eclat with a final verse would be good. I await your inspirational ideas, preferably sooner than later...
sometimes it is easier to heal others than ourselves...
ReplyDeleteIt stands on its own, I think. I loved it. But you know I'm no poet; though learning to appreciate.
ReplyDeleteBy Jove, I've got it! I think...I'll email it to you, jinksy ;) I like this one, I do. Kinda reads like a limerick but with that extra line. It nearly works :)
ReplyDeleteHello Jinksy,
ReplyDeleteI've been trying to compose but I'm not up to two poems in a day! I shall look forward to the eclat of others.
I so love the description the receptionist gives of the doctor.
ReplyDeleteHe climbed back into bed
Pulled the blankets over his head
With a big sigh he fell asleep
His dreams were making him laugh
In them he was riding a giraffe
And fell off into mud so deep.
The bell on the phone
The doctor began to weep.
We cannot help smile, to hear the tables turned!
ReplyDeleteTechnobabe- I think the giraffe did it for me!
ReplyDeleteI believe it inspired me to arrive at a suitable zany conclusion - TA!
With the doc home in bed
ReplyDeleteHis nurse filled with dread
She had no time to make cancellations
Though it's rather contrived
His patients arrived
And took in the news with frustration
She recalled what she said
When she sent Doc home to bed
And considered her newfound position
The doctor was out
But the nurse is about
And it seems she's a fine diagnostician
He flopped out on the bed
ReplyDeletean ice pack on his head,
his feet keeping warm on a hottie.
If he gets any worse
I shall send for the nurse
to give hima jab in his bottie.
(sorry about that but you did say silly!)
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ReplyDeleteHe put on pajamas,
Light blue ones with llamas
And tigers and lions adorning,
Then he crawled into bed
Where he slept like one dead,
And called himself in the morning.
He put on pyjamas,
ReplyDeletelight blue ones with llamas
and tigers and lions adorning
Oh, yes, RWP! LOL :)
Weaver - you've missed your vocation!
ReplyDeleteHow Fun! Rhymes and laughs all around.
ReplyDeleteI had as much reading your comments jinsky as I did your post.....you are getting very good at this my friend......:-) Hugs
ReplyDeleteid\f bob can have a go at it so can i...................doc headed back to work................the $ he makes, not want to shirk...............worse and worse and then real sick...........stopped at last at the pub.................wants to impress his club................he dropped dead at the quick
ReplyDeleteOh my word are you all good!! I loved the poem. Your style is always so sweet and cute all at the same time!! Thanks for a good chuckle:)
ReplyDeleteI'm tired of this life
ReplyDeletefull of grey boring strife
Time for some fun
a holiday in the sun
A long trip to Spain
with Jinksy that Minxy
should alleviate pain
I'll bring my guitar
and make Jinsky a star
She will become famous
I will remain nameless
I think it is perfect as it....but I'm telling you I would not want to be seen by that doctor. :)
ReplyDeleteHave a great weekend!
This day can’t get worse
ReplyDeleteHe said with a curse
But he knew not that there was no Mrs.
“Oh! Honey, I’m home!”
But she’d gone to Rome
With the pool boy and all of Doc’s riches.
I'm surprised doctors don't get sick more often than what they do. Happy week-end.
ReplyDeleteBut when he looked down
ReplyDeleteHe saw with a frown
The pills he had taken were blue
"Viagra!", he swore,
And kicked at the floor
"Bother! Something else I need do!"
haha!
ReplyDeleteHow about ...
But no sooner was Doc
Fast asleep like a rock
Than the 'ceptionist phoned all a-jitter
'Come back, come back quick!
I am feeling so sick,
And I need you to come make me better!'
Best I can offer today, but at least I tried! LOL!
uytrurtyij
ReplyDeleteHilary nailed it!
ReplyDeletevery nice poem, high in imagery with a great flow..:)
ReplyDeleteActually I like Suldog's but i would being a pharmacist.....
ReplyDelete*giggles*
ReplyDeleteWasn't this the moment
when in came the nurse
with the crocodile purse? ;-)
I loved Suldog's and Rhymeswithplagues's 'and called himself in the morning'. Brilliant!
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